TEACHER'S FEEDBACK TO ESSAY 3: PROFILING A PLACE OR ACTIVITY

PURPOSE: Using information gleaned from an interview but without referring to him/herself and to the interview itself in the essay, does the writer profile a place or activity and offer an interpretation of the subject as required by the essay genre assigned?  Does the writer state a purpose on the coversheet that is appropriate to the essay genre assigned?

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AUDIENCE: Does the writer designate an audience appropriate for the subject profiled, sufficiently narrow the audience, and adapt content and language to that audience?

_____ Satisfactory            _____ Somewhat Satisfactory            _____ Unsatisfactory     

THESIS: Does the writer express a clear, specific, and appropriate thesis that gives a dominant impression or interpretation of the subject being profiled?

_____ Satisfactory            _____ Somewhat Satisfactory            _____ Unsatisfactory

DEVELOPMENT: Does the writer provide plenty of concrete information (including details, examples, definitions, illustrations) and at least one quotation from the interview source to present an interesting, complete, and accurate account of the subject? Does the writer accurately document the essay using the MLA format for parenthetical citations and Works Cited?

_____ Satisfactory            _____ Somewhat Satisfactory            _____ Unsatisfactory

ORGANIZATION: Does the writer choose an organizational pattern that logically follows from the thesis (usually topical), and does the writer cue the reader by providing adequate transitions among paragraphs?

_____ Satisfactory            _____ Somewhat Satisfactory            _____ Unsatisfactory

LANGUAGE USAGE: Does the writer choose language that expresses an appropriate tone toward the subject and audience and avoid grammatical and mechanical errors that detract from the essay's message?

_____ Satisfactory            _____ Somewhat Satisfactory            _____ Unsatisfactory

TEACHER'S GENERAL RESPONSE

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_____Follow up with Teacher Conference                    _____Attend Writing Center